IELTS essays writing task 2

The Internet has provided great benefits, but at the same time it has also
created new dangers and inequalities. Is it possible to control some of these
problems?
It is fairly obvious that the Internet has revolutionized much of society.
Individuals benefit from access to abundant amounts of information on the World
Wide Web, as well as being able to communicate easily and cheaply with friends
and strangers. For the business world the impact has been even more dramatic. Vast
sums of money are constantly being transferred around the world by electronic
means. Banks and other businesses now totally depend on the Internet.
There are, however, significant dangers in this development. The first problem
that deserves a public concern is dangers from hacking the system and either
obtaining secret information or introducing viruses that cause immense loss. It is
likely that this problem can never be completely solved. As soon as technology is
developed to overcome one hacker, another one produces some new strategies.
Apart from this technical problem, however, there is a much deeper one, and
that is the inequality between individuals and societies, which the Internet is making
worse. The gap between the rich and the poor is growing rapidly in the world, and
access to the Internet is a significant part of the problem. Developing countries
where schools cannot afford computers, and small businesses which do not have
Internet access are being left further and further behind.
Some people believe that if computers are widely distributed in poor societies,
this would be an important way to reduce the inequalities. Others feel that the
problem is much deeper, and needs to be dealt with by bodies such as World Trade
Organization.
The answer is probably that all possible methods should be used to break down
the inequalities, including access to the Internet, to ensure that the world does
become more and more stable.
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It is sometimes argued that because tertiary education is of greater benefit
to the individual than to the society, all students should pay full fees. What is

your opinion?
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As the modern world is becoming increasingly complex and knowledge is
becoming more and more specialized, there is no doubt that tertiary education is
necessary both for the whole society and for individuals who want to ensure that
they have a good profession. The question of who benefits more is important to
societies and governments in declining who should be expected to pay for the costs
involved. This interesting question is worth a thorough discussion.
There is no doubt that the whole society benefits. In all developing countries
there has been a strong effort to raise the educational level of the society by putting
as much money as possible into providing educational institutions. Universities and
colleges are, however, expensive to run. Because of this, it is felt that such countries
are held back in all forms of development. Without enough educated professionals
such as doctors, teachers, scientists and engineers, developing countries cannot
move ahead. Governments in such countries provide scholarships, or free education,
to as many students as they can afford, because they realize that the whole country
will benefit. Many developed countries also try to offer free tertiary education
because they want a highly educated population.
However, there is also a strong argument that individuals benefit so much from
tertiary education that they should be expected to pay for it. Doctors, lawyers,
accountants and engineers have some of the highest incomes in most countries.
People argue that the government, and therefore the taxpayers, should not pay for
students who will later earn more than anyone else. Moreover, most students come
from the middle classes, and their parents can afford to pay for their fees. There are,
of course, some students who cannot afford to pay. This problem can be overcome
by a system like the one being used in Australia, for example. The government gives
the students a loan to pay for their fees, and later, when they are earning a good
salary, they repay the loan.

It is probably impossible to decide whether the individual or the society benefits
more from tertiary education, but since both benefits, the costs should probably be
paid for by both equally.
Words: 356

The Responsibility for the Environment
Environment problems have recently become a serious subject which receive a
lot of public concern. There is polluted air and water everywhere and we also know
that the greenhouse effect is changing our weather and that the hole in the ozone
layer is causing skin cancer. However, not enough is being done to solve these
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problems because most people seem to be waiting for governments' actions. In fact,
the responsibility for protecting the environment must be shared by everyone.
Individuals can and should do many things to help to solve the problem before it is
too late.
The first opinion put in illumination is that people can make sure that they are
responsible in the way that they dispose of waste. If people throw rubbish like
plastic into rivers and oceans, it always stays there, and causes fish and seabirds to
die. It is also important to note that we should not buy goods that have too much
wrapping on them, especially plastic wrapping, because if we do, we are adding to
the huge amount of waste.
People also need to be responsible in the way that they use water. In some
countries, like Australia, an enormous amount of water is wasted for swimming
pools, and washing cars. Most countries are running out of fresh water. For instance,
Singapore has to purchase every single litre of fresh water, which cost a large fund
from the state and individual budgets.
If people used their cars less, this would help to prevent the greenhouse effect.
Everyone can turn to use mass transits, or use bicycles, or even walk, instead of

using their cars for even short trips. Undeniably, traffic fumes are one of the major
causes of global warming.
Finally yet importantly the most important thing that individuals can do is to let
their governments know that they want something to be done about the environment.
It is obvious that the governments will not do anything unless the people force them
to.
It is therefore clear that individuals must take responsibility for the
environment. Otherwise, it will soon be too late, and we and the next generation will
suffer serious consequences.
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We are obviously producing more and more rubbish. Why is it happening?
What should people do to reduce rubbish?
There is little room for doubt that garbage on earth is alarmingly increasing. It is time
people brought the topic to seminars to warn the public of this issue. In my personal point
of view, it is a good idea to attack the reasons for the improving amount of litter before
figuring out optimal solutions to the problem.
It is undeniable that there have been many causes of rubbish. First and foremost,
population boom is mainly responsible for a tremendous increase in garbage. It is logical to
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that they litter more from what they have used. Secondly, manufacturers have utilized
many unnecessary things attached to the main products to appeal shoppers due to
commercial competition. In reality, these enclosed things are just discarded right before the
main products come into use because they do not have any value in use. They are, in
essence, just to decorate the items. For instance, to make Johnson and Johnson shampoo
the best sellers, the producers use a colorful string wrap, which does not have any value

other than draws shoppers’ attention. This string wrap is obviously very harmful to the
environment since it takes very long time for nylon to decompose. Eventually, some people
are unaware of the dangers of rubbish. As a result, they litter in many places, including
tourist attractions and streets. Especially, in developing countries, such as Vietnam,
Thailand, and Myanmar, it is not difficult to see garbage on the streets.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, immediate actions should be taken by
individuals and authorized organizations. What I am first concerned about is education
plays a major role in limiting waste. The governments around the world need to educate
their own citizens about the potential risks of garbage, particularly the items made from
rubber, plastics, and nylon as such matter causes extreme soil pollution. Restricting the use
of long-lasting rubbish, in other words, is tremendously significant. Besides, another
crucial solution is building up waste-recycling plants to reuse throw-away from
individuals. It is certainly the government’s liability because individuals cannot do this. In
a smaller scale, all citizens also need to be responsible for the purity of the environment
that they and their descendants have been living in. Unquestionably, some people are
irresponsible; they litter in an uncontrolled manner due to their low level of education.
In a nutshell, the whole society needs to join hands in protecting surroundings by
restricting and recycling discharge. Take actions right now before it is too late! Otherwise,
one day we will have to live in the dump of garbage that we have disposed of.
Words: 446
Some people think it is their responsibility to take care of the elderly people in
their own family. Others, however, think it is the state’s responsibility. Which opinion
do you agree with?
In different cultures, people have different ideas on who should be responsible for
taking care of the elderly people. In particular, Western cultures think the government
should be liable for elderly people, whereas Eastern Cultures believe it is a sin to leave old
parents alone. The debate needs to be thoroughly illuminated to figure out the logical
perspective.
What deserves most people’s concern in order to determine the person responsible is
retired people’s contributions. During people’s tenure, they have obviously made

contributions to the entire society to a certain extent. It would be absolutely no doubt that
the government needs to pick up the bill. Opponents of this view argue that the elderly
have also contributed greatly to their own families, so their families must be responsible
for them. This standpoint, in my personal opinion, is a sophistry. Retired people have in

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part devoted their life to their children because they want their children to have enjoyable
lives. They would be unsatisfied if we ask their children to take an extra burden.
Another logical reasoning is old people’s health must be cared better if the state takes
action. Undeniably, nursing homes are better-equipped than private houses. When the
elderly live in the nursing home, their health can be tested regularly by good doctors and
nurses who are always available to help. Moreover, they can live with other people at
similar ages, so they are not isolated within walls after retirement as in their children’s
houses. People who disagree with this point reckon that parents are generally more content
with living with their children and grandchildren. On the contrary, they are not in reality.
Do you think an 80-year-old lady can stand metal rock played by children? Living in such
a place, the elderly must be tremendously tortured. They do not have a minute to relax.
Finally yet importantly, aged people deserve welfare since they have paid insurance
when they are in work. It is a sin if the society passes the buck to their families. Social
benefits are just, in my point of view, returns to their advance payment. If the government
refuses to subsidize the old, who is willing to pay insurance? People who object to this
perspective refute that their young babies should live with grandparents to share experience
and look after their houses while they are away from home. Nevertheless, this argument is
absolutely invalid. They are clearly taking advantage of their parents, not taking care of
them. This opinion is obviously another sophistry. It is clear that they do not mind how
their parents feel, but think for themselves. They are hiring maids to do their household
chores for free. This scheme proves that both the state itself and children pass the ball to
each other and avoid their liabilities.

In a nutshell, it is logical that the entire society, not family units, must be responsible
for taking care of elderly people. Many people must form a big warm round helping the
old. Do not forget to thank the people making you become who you are today! Words: 517

The World’s Wrong Reasoning
Some people think dieting can change people’s life for the better. However, others
believe that people do not need to have a diet. Which opinion do you agree with?
There is little room for doubt since the first popular diet “banning” was developed in
1863, people around the world have been more aware of their eating habit. Then, many
people reckon that human beings need to have a diet for a better living. Nevertheless, in my
opinion, it is no use dieting.
The first idea put in illumination is that eating a variety of food strengthens people’s
health. Scientifically, our body needs diverse sources of food, which provide our body with
a sufficient number of vital functional nutrients. If we consume enough food, we may have
a good health, a pursuit to many people. People in favor of dieting argue this practice may
boost one’s health. However, this perspective is invalid. Research proves primitive people
had better health than we do now although they did not make sense of a diet. They even
endured harsh weather and could fight against dangerous giant animals. Dare you

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challenge a tiger as they did? Eating inadequately can ruin one’s health as claimed by most
nutritionists.
The second aspect taken into account is an intake of much edible food improves
metabolism. Undeniably, fat, as a bad image to most dieters, makes our skin smoother and
look fresher. Without fat, our skin must come apart like old fabric. Another kind of food
that most dieters avoid is carbohydrate. This kind of supply sure provides us energy to
work long hours. Without fat and carbohydrate, people must look like scary living
skeletons on Halloween Day. People who support dieting may refute that eating much can

make them overweight. I personally accept that obesity should be avoided. However, this
disease is mainly caused by passive lifestyle, not the food consumption. For instance,
athletes eat much, but they still have a good shape. Obviously, diet supporters are
absolutely lazybones, who do not work out much and find it an easy way to keep fit. This is
really a sophistry. If people eat much and exercise on a regular basis, they will have a good
body build and health. On the contrary, if they eat little and do not do any exercise, they
may look palely slim and out of energy.
Finally yet importantly, eating is human enjoyment. Why do we need to skip the food
that we like? What do we live for if we enjoy life? Without eating what we like, life is not
worth living. It is true that dieters are deprived of their right to eat. Those who support
dieting reckon people should have controlled eating habits. Nonetheless, research findings
say when we feel like a dish, our body is actually in need of its ingredients. I personally
believe our body is a good guide to our eating habit. I guess extreme dieters must regret a
great deal when they get old. They will look worse and regret that they do not enjoy
themselves when they are young.
In the final analysis, it is no use skipping edible food we like to eat. If we eat much
and exercise much, we both enjoy life, have a good health, and a nice-looking appearance.
Do not skip food and regret later.

Conflicts between Parents and Children
Some people view conflicts between parents and teenage children as a
necessary part of growing up, whilst others view it as something negative which
should be avoided. Which opinion do you agree with?
Adolescence is traditionally a difficult age when young people go through
physical and psychological changes in a comparatively short period of time. As a
result, conflicts between teenagers and their parents are inevitable. It is important to
understand that different cultures, Western and Asian, see this phenomenon quite
differently. In my personal point of view, conflicts play a significant role in a child’s
development.
In the first place, parents can understand their children more thanks to their

controversies. Fathers and mothers, after a conflict, can know their children’ needs
and expectations since their children’s personality traits develop over time. With a
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satisfactory explanation, teenagers can consider their parents friends. As a result,
they are willing to consult with their parents when they are really in need of good
advice. It must be extremely harmful if teenagers disagree with their parents but do
not want to express their own opinions. Consequently, they possibly release stress by
hanging out with their bad friends. Opponents think this kind of conflict may put the
family on ice. However, this view is not strong as a gap is not usually formed
between understanding people. Do you keep away from a person who understands
you and is willing to share your problems?
Besides strengthening relationships between family members, conflicts
generally help adolescent people get experience from their parents. From my
perspective, when young people disagree with their parents, it is advisable for them
to speak out what they are thinking about. Owing to their discussion, they can
distinguish the right from the wrong. In other words, they can inherit experience
from their parents through conflicts. People who disagree with this standpoint argue
that children should always obey their parents inasmuch as parents’ words are rules.
Nevertheless, this mindset needs to be changed because it violates children’s rights.
It is essential to note that teenagers are also human, and they certainly have their
own voice. Moreover, after 15, they are deemed to have equal civil rights as others.
Finally yet importantly, conflicts help children “stand on their own feet”. As a
matter of fact, parents cannot live with their children forever. It is crucial that
parents help children make their own decisions. By this way, young people can
mentally develop over time. Children will never live and think independently if they
have to do whatever their parents want them to. How can they build up their own
families after getting married if they have to ask their parents for permission
whenever they want to do anything? Do you want your children to be determined

bosses or just living robots that only take given orders? People on the other side
think teenagers must be obedient now that they are not mature enough to make
decisions. This opinion is absolutely wrong. An arising question is at what age they
should be allowed to make their own decisions. Teenage is the age that people are
mentally and physically growing up due to their physical and psychological changes.
This is a suitable time for parents to help shape their characteristics. Otherwise, they
will never be independent thinkers or leave their parents due to their parents’
illogical treatments.
As in the aforementioned discussions, conflicts are sure critical. They help
children develop themselves and become independent thinkers. If you are a good
parent, help your children shape their mindset. Do not force them to follow your
ideas or you will regret later.
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Most high-level positions in companies are occupied by men. The government
should encourage organizations to offer more high-rank positions to females. Do you
agree or disagree?
In many countries, women make up a high percentage of the workforce, but most
managerial jobs are filled by males. From my perspective, more top positions in companies
should be allocated to women.
In term of intelligence, women are potentially good leaders. Many women have
scored higher than men on the IQ Test. Undeniably, one’s intelligence plays a significant
role in his or her achievements. If a manager is very intelligent, he or she has advantages
over others in leadership. Opponents say chromosome “Y” in men makes them intuitively
cleverer than women. However, this view is feverishly debated. These findings, according
to a lot of scientists, are invalid and unreliable. Besides, one’s intelligence can be modified
by nutrients. A great deal of food supplement, such as Ensure milk, is invented to help
improve people’s IQ.
In addition to intelligence, women also have good characteristics, such as patience

and sensitivity, to become good managers. It is to say patience and sensitivity are crucial
factors for a person to succeed in their jobs, especially management. If a director is patient
and sensitive, he or she do not give up their tasks halfway and can feel changes in their
business. People with an opposing idea argue that females’ unassertiveness does not make
them efficient chairwomen. Nevertheless, this opinion is not strong since ladies, in my
personal opinion, are not actually unassertive, but open-minded. It is important that good
leaders listen to their employees and advisers. Moreover, people are now living in
democracy. It is ridiculous to say open-minded managers are unassertive.
Besides advantages of intelligence and suitable characteristics, females, by and large,
live longer as proved by surveys. As a result, they can contribute more to the society than

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men. People in favor of allocating top positions to men think women are weak sex and care
not healthy enough to occupy these key posts. Nonetheless, this standpoint is
unquestionably unacceptable because this term is obsolete and managerial jobs are not
manual, but mental. Why do women need to be muscular to make vital decisions?
Finally yet importantly, it is fair to let women dominate critical tasks in organizations.
Research says women now account for more than 50% of labor force. Women’s voice need
to be raised. Men are born equal. In other words, all people should be treated equally. Why
is a larger proportion of labor filled by women with a lower voice? Opponents say women
are born to be housewives. However, this is a clear-cut example of sex discrimination,
which needs to be discarded. They also argue governments around the world should not
interfere much with companies’ labor distribution. However, is it essential to change social
prejudice for justice?
As in the aforementioned discussion, women should be allowed to get top-level jobs
in organizations. They are obviously making efforts to develop the society. Do not be
conservative! Do not let people call you a stubborn laggard.
Reducing crime by attacking poverty and a lack of education opportunities.

To reduce crime, governments around the world should focus more on improving
community education and living standard rather than having many police officers on the
streets and putting many convicts in the prison. Do you agree or disagree?
Crime, a social evil, has emerged as an alarming danger in society these days.
Criminals have soared in number and seriousness. Some people think that governments had
better develop education to restrict crime. However, in my opinion, this perspective is just
biased.
The police force is necessary to maintain the security of a community. Without these
policemen and women, car thefts and burglaries will undoubtedly increase because the
existence of patrolling police sure threatens criminals. It is widely known that convicts
only pursue their ill intent when they think it is safe enough for them to act illegally. Many
people in favor of education argue that people become criminals when they are unaware of
laws. However, this view is not actually convincing. It is acceptably a fact that many welleducated people also commit crime. For instance, President Nixon of USA was known to
cover up the break-in of five burglars. It must be ridiculous to say the person passing and
vetoing laws does not know about them.
In addition, reducing sentences clearly decreases criminals’ fear of prison. The prison
is the place where criminals regret and change their way. In the prison with limited space,
they can also understand the value of freedom and will not re-offend when they are
released. Some people in favor of reducing sentences think jails are very expensive. This
standpoint, nonetheless, is really not persuasive because everyone is certainly willing to
pay for their security. Do you want to pay some to live in peace or keep all your money but
always worry you will be robbed?

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Last yet importantly, the beggar’s bag is bottomless. How rich is considered to be
rich? Some rich people also commit crime to be wealthier. For example, we can hear a lot
of news about corruption and bribery and those who commit them are very rich because
money is the root of all evils. The proponents of education argue convicts are committed to

crime because they are poor. Nevertheless, I strongly disagree with this view. Don’t bank
robbers stop their illegal acts after they win a great deal of bucks?
Suffice it to say, it is significant to have many police on the streets for community
security. It is crucial to understand some people are a real danger to the society.
Words: 373

Many people think hi-tech, in forms of television and Internet, dramatically
damages communication between family members and between friends. Do you agree
or disagree? (Argument-led approach)
There is a controversial opinion at hand over the issue that hi-tech ruins people’s
communication. They converse with each other less than they did in the past. However, I
believe that technology development improves human communication tremendously.
The relevant priority human beings need to be concerned about is television actually
makes people exchange their ideas more than ever. Naturally, people can come up with
some ideas about the program they are watching. They can agree or disagree with the
incidents in the movie on. It is no doubt that they tend to bring what is on their mind to a
discussion with their friends or family. Opponents may think that people in the modern life
often watch telly alone because technology makes it cheaper. Nonetheless, this idea is not
strong. Undeniably, the number of families with more than one TV only makes up a
minority. In some places over the world, such as Africa, some families do not even have
one TV each. Furthermore, in some situations, people would rather watch TV together than
see it alone. For example, in the football seasons, many football fans throughout the world
gather at stadiums and Internet café to watch football together since they think it is more
fun. Undeniably, watching football without making and listening to comments on the live
match would be low-key. In short, television definitely boosts people’s communication.
What also deserves my consideration is the Internet helps people in the world keep in
touch with each other. Unquestionably, a large number of people throughout the world use
the Internet to contact one another. They negotiate their business stuff at work and
exchange their ideas or have gossip at home. Without the Internet, international
transactions would be very difficult. More specifically, they are communicating via email,

SMS, Skype, and text message. According to a recent survey conducted by USA, each
person spends at least an hour online. People with an opposing standpoint may think that
online chatters do not really communicate. They just exchange ideas impersonally. This
perspective is significantly weak because now people can use some applications, such as
Skype and YM, to talk with other people effectively. They can see each other on webcam.
Moreover, VDSL considerably serves human communication. Some parents may argue the

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Internet ruins communication between people inasmuch as their children spend a
considerable share of their time online. However, they are short-sighted. Their children
communicate more than they have thought. They do not talk to their parents much, but they
spend much time chatting with their online community. Is it called communication? It
absolutely is. They do communicate! In brief, the Internet helps people keep contact, and
improve business transactions to a significant extent.
Suffice it to say, technology actually serves human communication a great deal. It
helps them exchange their points of view on their personal and professional lives. Learn to
use technology to keep up with the rest of the world or you will lag behind. Words: 490

To what extent do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology serves such an important function that people cannot live
without it. (Argument-led approach)
To improve the living standard, humans have made many attempts to develop
technology. Many people think technology is so important that humans cannot live
without. Some others debate that technology is only luxurious stuff. It is hard to find
a satisfactory answer to the question until it has been illuminated in a thorough
discussion.
The people in favor of technology often think humans are benefited greatly
from technology. First, it can help people save time. Undoubtedly, aircraft is an

advanced breakthrough which helps people travel a long distance in a far shorter
time than our grandparents used to. Second, hi-tech also connects people throughout
the world. Obviously, advances in telecommunication, such as telephones and the
Internet, assist people much in keeping in touch with each other even if they live half
the earth away from each other. Third, it saves a great deal of species. More
specifically, scientists are swinging away from vivisection these days as they can
take advantage of computer simulation to test chemicals before application.
On the other hand, some people argue that such claims are not always true.
First, technology is not absolutely time-saving. Undeniably, many modern devices
are supposed to be helpful in doing household chores. If people want to save time of
food preparation, they can use a fruit blender. However, do not forget to take into
account your time of cleaning it before and after use! And they have to buy batteries
when the installed ones are dead. Second, they also reckon hi-tech does not comfort
human life much. It is widely known that many advertisements have recommended
appliances making customers feel at ease. For example, people can listen to music
when taking a shower and they can enjoy massage service from robots.
Nevertheless, be cautious in case the robots have electric shock. Third, hi-tech puts
family members on ice. To satisfy the need for cosmetic services, corporation
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invented sleep masks or eye masks to prevent ladies’ eyes from sagging and “chin
raise” to protect their chin from being droopy. Nonetheless, if you wake up one day
and your mate disappears, do not be surprised!
Suffice it to say, to a certain extent, hi-tech improves human life. However,
humans should not abuse it. If overused, technology can bring more drawbacks than
benefits.
Words: 379
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Twenty years from now, people will no longer use printed books.

(Argument-led approach)
Together with the development of science, people have used e-books, edictionaries as alternatives to printed books. They think these substitutes are more
convenient and will replace printed books in a couple of decades. Whether this
perspective is feasible is worth a careful discussion.
The people in favor of printed books think these sources of information are
irreplaceable. First, printed books must undergo a serious censorship before
publication. Undoubtedly, all the countries in the world have official agents in
charge of book censorship. If any information in a book is unreal or unreliable, it
will not be published until it has appropriate revisions. Second, the books sold at
bookshops often receive feedback from readers. In addition, bookshops are only
interested in trading best-sellers for profit, which most readers think are
interesting. Third, while some countries are still developing, printed books are
actually accessible in these places. They can buy, or even borrow printed books from
their acquaintances.
The people with an opposing opinion may mistakenly think that the
advantages of internet information outnumber its disadvantages. One of the
main arguments is that it is plentiful. However, is its abundance meaningful when
some people do not know how to turn on computer? Only printed books can serve
this important role. Some other people may reckon online information is updated. To
be exact, the updated information is not censored prudentially. For example, just a
short time ago, there was some striking posted information about UFO on the
Internet, but after some days online community received a stupid excuse that it was
just a ridiculous fake that even advanced specialists needed some time to realize.
When asked, no one knew who the poster was and no country was responsible for it.
Dare you use such information in your research paper of the outer space? Another
group of people may argue that these e-references are convenient because readers
can hit them anywhere and anytime. This reason, nevertheless, is obviously
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insignificant because some scholars, if they spend most of their time working with a
computer, will soon get blind as warned by specialists.
As illuminated, printed books have been playing an indispensable role in human
civilization and they will continue to be the primary dependable sources that people
cannot live without in the future. Sources of information, in forms of printed books,
will last until the doom day of human life. Word count: 395
Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be
paid according to how well their students perform.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
(Thesis-led approach)
There many different opinions on how much money a school should pay to its
teachers. Some people think that teachers’ salaries should be based on how well their
students perform. Others disagree with this statement because that method can make
teachers only pass on important things for the tests, can be unfair for teachers, and may
force some teachers put too much pressure on their students. As far as I am concerned, I
strongly approve of the latter perspective.
First and foremost, if teachers’ salaries are primarily based on how well their students
perform, the teachers will not provide their students with the best, but only necessary
things to score high since they notice their pays will be low provided that their students’
grades are not good enough. That is, the teachers know that the higher grades the students
accumulate in their class, the more money they will get. To do that, the lecturers may use
the strategy “Teaching to the test”. They may spend a lot of time teaching their students
only the information which will appear on the tests, which are the most common way to
assess students’ performances. They will not aim at real proficiency and competence.
Therefore, students will have fewer opportunities to absorb good knowledge of different
fields or they may become more passive, and too lazy to think. Undoubtedly, all of these
may be harmful for students in the school.
Furthermore, using the quality of students’ academic performances decides how much
salary the school should pay teachers is an inequitable method. In fact, in the class,
different learners have different abilities to comprehend knowledge from lectures. As a

matter of fact, students’ grades also depend mainly on many factors such as their
intelligence, diligence, and concentration. How can learners get high scores if they do not
study hard enough? How can they express their academic understanding on the test if they
are often absent from their classes? Thus, student’s record-based salary scheme for
teachers is completely unjust.
Finally, in order to avoid getting a low salary, teachers may become far stricter than
necessary. This may create a harsh pressure on all the students. It would not be a great
worry if this were to stimulate or pull these laggards climb up to a higher rank. However,
many teachers may think that these learners are a bad factor which will sooner or later
decrease their incomes, so these instructors may treat these students more harshly and show
their bad attitudes towards these students. As a result, the class atmosphere would be very

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hostile and uncomfortable for students to try their best. In brief, teachers’ attitudes may
decline in class if their students prove to potentially reduce their salaries, which will in turn
destroy the teacher-student relationship.
In conclusion, there are a lot of ways to decide how much salary teachers should get.
However, the merit-based pay scheme is sure bad for both teachers and students.
Comment: This essay does not have any examples.
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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is better for students to take classes for more than 11 months throughout
the year. Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
(Thesis-led approach)
There is a controversy nowadays over the issue of whether students should
attend classes more than 11 months. Some people hold the opinion that it is a great
idea. Some others, on the other hand, think quite differently and argue that studying

throughout the year would be very tiring for students since they need time for their
vacation. I personally think that learning all year round students have no time to gain
real experience, to earn money and to take the edge off.
At the start, going through academic issues throughout the year leaves students
no time to obtain real situations related to their study. It is a matter of fact that
students need to have more practice, especially the practice that they acquire in real
life such as internships, or summer jobs because most theories they learn will be for
nothing if they do not know how to apply them to their life or job. A certain amount
of time off must be ideal for them to touch the real things that they have heard about.
Take my case as a concrete example to illustrate this; on my summer holiday, I
worked as a tour guide for a travel agency. I underwent many challenging situations
which I had never hit in any book, which was relatively valuable for my major. Then
when I resumed the next academic semester, I applied what I learnt in two months of
work to my study, especially in my tests and did get quite high scores as expected
since I did not mechanically use the information from books in my answers, but the
interesting and authentic information accumulated from my summer job. In brief,
having time to gain experience in real life obviously widens students’ knowledge of
their major and is the first and foremost reason why students should not always stick
to books and theoretical lectures.
In the second place, what deserves my consideration is that students will have
time to get a sufficient amount of money to pay their tuition and cover their living
expenses in the following year. During the school year, students certainly have a lot
of academic commitments and do not have time to do so. If they work part time and
study simultaneously, their scores would not be good enough if not too poor. Last
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year, my friend Tam, who was a student at Ha Noi University of Industry, could
afford a new laptop to boost her study from the money that she earned from a
summer job without parents’ help. Undoubtedly, having time from a long holiday is

very advantageous for students in respect of finance.
The final reason taken into my account is that if students attend their classes
more than 11 months, they will not have time to unwind. Unquestionably, studying
all the time is very stressful. Having a long vacation, students can relieve stress and
get enough energy in order to cope with potential challenging subjects in the next
semester. For example, after the ninth grade, I did not have time to relax due to
summer classes, but started my senior high school immediately. As a result, the tenth
grade year was actually terrible for me inasmuch as I always felt exhausted. My
scores, consequently, were comparatively low and I had to retake some courses later.
In short, having time to relax is extremely necessary for students after a hardworking school.
In a nutshell, remarkable benefits of having a long vacation are the convincing
reasons to disprove the idea that students should be required to attend classes more
than 11 months per year. A long rest will provide students with time to gain real
lessons, to earn money and to escape from stress. Undeniably, those who want to
succeed in their study should not spend the whole year studying.
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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your
opinion. (Thesis-led approach)
We cannot deny the parents’ roles in our success. They have taught us from the first
minute of our life to our adulthood. Some people say that parents are the best teachers.
Others believe that although parents always want to bring their kids the best education,
they do not always make the best teachers. From my point of view, I strongly approve of
the latter perspective for some reasons.
First of all, there is a fact that it is hard for parents to be best teachers due to their

deficiency of various academic fields. They may teach their children some etiquette and
fundamental knowledge such as how to behave with others politely or how to solve a
simple math assignment. However, when children enter a high school or a university their
parents may not have enough academic knowledge to assist them inasmuch as their majors
and their children’ majors differ in most situations. For instance, when I was in the middle
school, my parents often assisted me to do some difficult homework. Nevertheless, when I
was in a high school and in a college my parents could not help me to solve any ofmy
assignments of math, physics or English at all. In brief, parents are unable to teach all the
subjects because they are not experts in the required subjects or electives which we pursue.
Another reason is that parents are too busy to be the best teachers. They have to earn
money to support the family. Additionally, they also have to do household chores and
pursue their own interests. Furthermore, they need time to unwind after hard-working days.
How can they teach their children well as they have a lot of work to do? For example, one
of my friends only studied with his classmates or his teachers when he was in a high
school. He could not even get little knowledge from his parents because his parents were
merchants, so they had to travel far regularly to find out potential customers and sign
contracts. Thus, most of the knowledge my friend had was passed on to from his school,
not his parents. It is no doubt to say that parents have limited time to teach their children
effectively.
Finally, many parents have some bad habits such as drinking alcohol, smoking or
dirty talk, and of course these factors may cause some negative effects on their children. To
young kids in many countries in the world, teachers are considered angels, the models for
children. They can easily pick up the bad habits from their teachers. It would be very
hazardous if children pick up these bad habits from their surroundings. That is why in
many countries throughout the world teachers are not allowed to smoke or drink in school.
To illustrate this point, take another friend of mine Hoang as an example. His father
smoked cigarettes in front of my friend whenever he stayed at home. He also often enticed
his friends to gamble overnight on and on. Naturally, my friend took these habits for
granted and imitated his father’s. When my friend was in a college, he often went out with
some bad guys and congregated them to play cards like his father. As a result, he always

got lower grades than his peers. This example proves parents are not always the best
teachers.
In conclusion, parents have a lot of important influences on their children.
Nevertheless, with all of the reasons that I have just discussed I absolutely think that
children will better educated by their teachers than by their parents.
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Topic1: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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It is more important to keep old friends than to make new friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your viewpoint.
(Thesis-led approach)
There is a feverish debate on the issue of whether keeping old friends or making new
friends is more significant. I myself personally agree with the common belief that it is more
crucial to keep old friends than to make new ones.
First and foremost, a long lasting rapport is more valuable than a fresh friendship.
Unquestionably, people who have been friends for years must understand each other better.
They clearly know their friends’ personality traits, which is extremely useful for them to
maintain their relationship as they can avoid hurting their friends’ feelings. They can also
know what their friends like and dislike. As a result, their friends can give them somewhat
sympathy and a useful hand when in need. Take my uncle as a concrete example, he is a
straightforward person. Last year, he really hurt his new friend’s feeling when they were
involved in a project. Mr Tuan, his new friend, stopped working with him on the project.
However, the other partners as his old friends did not complain about his characteristic
because they were acquainted with his manner and understood he was only
straightforward, not impolite at all. Consequently, his old friends helped him accomplish
the unfinished project successfully.
In the second place, what deserves my consideration is that people often consult their

reliable old friends when they are in trouble. It is undeniable that people’s good
relationship develops over time. Statistically, many people in dilemma come over to
consult their old friends because they believe their old friends are more reliable than the
new ones. They can tell their old friends about their personal secrets, critical decisions, and
even business strategies to carry out without being worried that they will be revealed. Take
a specific example, Nghia and I have been close friends since we were high school
students. Whenever I have any trouble, including personal and business problems, I always
ask her for advice. Within my expectation, she never retells my issues to anyone. Old
friends, to me, are actually trustful advisers.
Last but not least, old friends, in most situations, are more helpful due to their long
commitments and good memories. It is undeniable that the longer people’ friendship is, the
more helpful they are. When people have remained friends for a long time, they have had
many commitments and good memories through their camping, journeys, and academic
and professional activities, through which they can judge their friends and know who their
friends are. They may also together overcome challenges in life. As a result, as they are in
trouble, their old friends must, in return, be willing to give them some assistance regardless
of potential difficulties. For instance, my friend Nam Anh used to help me much in school.
Whenever I had difficulty doing exercises and homework, he always lent me a hand with
willingness. In return, a last month, when he got parted with his girlfriend, I was the one to
help him a great deal. After that terrible stage, our friendship was strengthened and we are
now still good friends.
All in all, old friends are generally more valuable than new friends. People can make
new friends, but maintaining and consolidating old friendships should be put in priority
inasmuch as rolling stones gather no moss (proverb).
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Topic: Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of

students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your
answer. (Thesis-led approach)
There is a controversy at hand over whether learning individually or learning in
groups is better. From my point of view, I prefer to study with a group of students because
it bringsme a lot of advantages such as exchanging good ideas and getting feedback and
advicefrom other group members.
What I put in priority is that people can get more good opinions from other members
when studying in a group. Unquestionably, two heads are better than one. In a group, each
member can come up with some ideas and then discuss with the others to conclude what
the best idea is. In addition, some members can suggest some innovations to their group
mates. Otherwise, studying individually, learners cannot obtain excellent ideas from others.
For example, last week my friend Tung and I had some trouble with writing an essay topic
since we had no idea to support our main ideas. I preferred to discuss this problem with the
members of my group and got some good ideas for my essay. As a result, I got an A for my
essay. My friend Tung, nevertheless, insisted on studying alone. Consequently, his essay
was poor of ideas. Peer education clearly accounts for students’ achievements.
Another reason taken into my account is that group study can help learners finish their
assignments quickly or at least by the deadline. When students learn in a group, they
mayshare their tasks with others. Undoubtedly, two people can complete a task faster than
one if they are organized. Take example, I frequently prepare assigned presentations in a
group. Sometimes we, including me and my group members, are so busy studying, but we
always accomplish the requirements before the date of presentation delivery. As illustrated,
sharing a task with their classmates helps students a great deal when they have a tight
schedule.
Last but not least, studying with a group of students helps people build up teamwork.
In modern life, people tend to highly appreciate cooperation. According to many surveys
recently conducted, many companies require their employees to work in groups. At school,
students had better get acquainted with this trend, which will actually beneficial for their
future job performance and to go in the mainstream. My cousin Hoan was a clear-cut
example. When he applied for a job, he had to experience a test evaluating whether he

could successfully socialize with other applicants. Thanks to his acquaintance with
studying in groups, he could prove his ability to get along with his potential workmates and
as a result he was chosen for the post. People, while still learning in school, should study in
groups to get used to this social tendency.
In general, studying with a group of people brings students an enormous number of
upsides inasmuch as it helps them get more creative ideas, perform their tasks quickly, and
get accustomed to cooperation as a trend in modern life. Words: 487
Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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Nowadays, people put too much emphasis on personal appearance and fashion.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (Thesis-led approach)
Today, more than ever, many people seem to be obsessed with how they look.
Unfortunately, only a small number of people fall out of the mainstream. A large number
of people, nonetheless, place too much emphasis on their personal appearance and fashion.
Shows and advertisements of fashion are tremendously increasing these days. There
are a big number of fashion shows and most of them are broadcasted live every day. It is
not difficult to find a fashion channel. Furthermore, some of them, as commercials,
annoyingly interrupt the program you are enjoying. In addition, magazines and newspapers
also set aside a large part for trendy clothes and accessories. Many people, especially
young mothers and teens, are really addicted to these advertisements. For example, my
cousin and her classmates spend approximately ten hours shopping for clothes a week
because they think it is a new trend among young people. They may feel ashamed if they
do not know new styles in discussions with their friends. Obviously, people in modern life
pay too much attention to their clothes and accessories.
Another sign taken into my account is that clinics of cosmetic surgery and beauty spas
are blooming in many places throughout the world. In California, manicure is a very
profitable job. A manicurist can earn enough money to support his or her whole family.

Previously, it was only for women, but now many men also do that tactful job due to the
increasing demand for beauty care. In Korea, it seems all showbiz stars have experienced at
least an cosmetic operation in order to be famous. Because of their infatuation with how
they look, they waste a lot of their money, which they had better spend on more critical
things. Many ladies are actually so obsessed with improving their appearance that they
have to go to spas two or three times a week. A serious case is Ms. . She had been addicted
to cosmetic surgery that she has undergone many operations. As a result, she now looks
like a cat, who everyone can be frightened of as they just have a quick glance.
Finally, many young people believe that how they look is the most significant quality
in an individual. This perspective can make people become very superficial and narrowminded inasmuch as clothes do not make a man (proverb). Many students tend to judge and
accept others into their network of friends for a very stupid reason of how they look and
how fashionable they are. On account of this tendency, a great deal of students ignore the
true personalities of their classmates and focus upon whether or not they look stylish. It is
undeniable that clothes people wear do not reveal that if they are good friends. My
classmate Loan is actually a clear-cut example. As any classmate comes to her for any
reason, she first looks at that person’s look now that she thinks going with a rural-looking
person may ruin her prettiness. In brief, young people concentrate too much on a person’s
appearance.
All in all, the increase in cosmetic surgery and the pressure people put on appearance
and fashion show how individuals in general place too much importance on how they look.
These factors can have negative impacts on people. They should be concerned about their
entire being, not just what they show on the outside. Words: 557

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Topic: Some people would rather go to classical classes. Others, on the other hand,
prefer E-learning. Which way of learning do you prefer? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your main point.
(Thesis-led approach)

Together with the development of information technology, many people want to study
online because of its conveniences. On the other hand, it goes without saying that there are
some disadvantages to getting a university on the internet. I reckon E-learning is not
actually a good alternative.
First and foremost, online learners sometimes do not manage to study. They can be
too lazy to go online for lectures from their professors owing to the flexi-hours of online
learning. They may think they can do it later. In the long run, it is hard for them to
accomplish the course. For example, I enrolled in an online university course last year. I
wanted an MBA. I thought I would have lots of time to fit it into my schedule, especially
on the weekends. However, I soon learned it was not that easy. On the weekends, I did not
want to study. I just wanted to rest and be with my family all the time. As a result, I did not
finish the course as expected.
Another problem is the reputation of the school. Some online schools are now
unaccredited. That is they do not have a good recognition. As a result, many institutes do
not accept the degrees granted by these schools. People may waste their time and money if
they unfortunately sign up for a course in one of these schools. Their hard work will be for
nothing. Some of these schools can be easily searched by Google. However, some other
degree mills are not updated. For instance, my friend Tuan had been studying so hard for
two years at an unrecognized online school. When he was about to finish his MBA course,
the school just disappeared and took his money.
What’s more, taking an online course, learners do find it hard to contact their
professors for help. The primary purpose of learning with professors is that students can
ask them about their inquiries that they have. If these learners need to talk to professors,
they only get professors’ impersonal instructions by email which are sometimes unclear
enough for them to make sense of. Furthermore, their email is not usually replied in time to
complete their assignments. There is really a communication barrier to e-learning between
students and their professors. Take an example, my colleague Son has been pursuing a
PBD course on the internet for four years, but he has mostly got instructions from their
friends as experts in the field. Unquestionably, getting a university degree online is really a
challenge to learners on account of its lack of professors’ help.

In a nutshell, there are many ways to get a university degree, but distant-learning is
not my preference inasmuch as learners may not feel obliged to learn, the school may not
have a good recognition, and learners’ instructions are frequently inadequate.
Words: 472
Topic: Do you think students should take a gap year before entering a college or
university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your view.
(Thesis-led approach)

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After high school, some students prefer to immediately attend a college or university,
but some others would like to take a gap year before signing up for a degree program. In
my personal point of view, it is better for them to have a break before entering a university.
For a start, in this year free of study, students can have a tremendous amount of time
to consider and choose a major most suitable for them to study in the university.
Unquestionably, during high school years, students do not have sufficient time to find out
which academic field they should pursue inasmuch as students are overwhelmed with their
assignments. Take example, in my final year of basic levels of education, I was unable to
think considerably about what major best fit my personality traits due to my tight schedule,
including the academic and extracurricular activities. After graduating from high school, I
took a year-long break and discovered I was most interested in mathematics teaching after
contemplating many alternatives. As a result, my grades of mathematics, as chosen, were
always rewarding. Differently from me, my classmate Nam chose physics as his major.
However, after two years, he had to drop out of the course since it was so boring for him. It
is clear that a gap year is a good time for students to think what major they would like to
study in higher education.
In the second place, a gap year is also a good time for students to make money to
support their college tuition. Obviously, higher education requires a lot of money, which is
really a tough barrier to those to want to keep on their track without financial aid from their

parents. Undeniably, those students who do not prepare enough money prior to their
registration for college study must encounter an unavoidable number of financial
challenges. Some of them have to drop out their courses or to work part time, which may
be responsible for their low scores or late graduation. In my case, before attending my
university program, I spent a year working full time. Thanks to this preparation, I earned an
adequate amount of money for my university tuition fees. However, my friend Tuan had to
deal with financial difficulties now that he could not focus on his study, but had to earn
money and study simultaneously. Not out of my anticipation, all of his scores were only
fair. It is clear that when people want to start their higher education, they need to earn
enough money in advance.
Finally, in this gap year, students have opportunities to gain valuable real life
experience. During this non-academic year, they can learn communication skills, and
acquire everyday experiences from their relatives, friends or strangers, which may be paid
off for their later major. Consequently, this acquisition, to a certain extent, helps them get
achievements in their major, enhance their academic strengths, or assist their independent
student life. For instance, after finishing high school, my cousin Nhan was accepted for a
position, which required her to travel a lot. This actually helped her live independently and
obtain a great deal of things in real life. As a result, she experienced a lot of cultures and
visited many tourist attractions, which was tremendously advantageous for her tourism
major. A year-long break inevitably provides students with good knowledge to prepare for
their later study.
In a nutshell, even though many people think that students should enter university or
college right after high school, I personally think that it is better for them to have a gap
year. In this non-academic year, students can have appropriate preparations accounting for
their expected success.

Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for teachers to help their students to gain self-confidence
than to teach them specific knowledge.
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(Thesis-led approach)
It is a public controversy at hand whether teachers should help their students
gain knowledge or build up their self-confidence. Some people hold the opinion that
it is better for students if they receive instructor’s help to become more confident.
Some others, on the other hand, think quite differently and take an opposing view.
At the individual level, I am standing on the side of the second view point. Attaining
specific knowledge is superior to the other in terms of fitting the main purpose of
students in schools, and providing optimal preparation for students’ further studies
as well as their future jobs.
To begin with, in respect of the primary purpose of students’ presence at school
that they would like to gain as much knowledge as possible to succeed in their
interests, teachers should offer their learners expected lessons of a particular area. As
a matter of fact, most students who go to college or university want to get
knowledge to perform their present or future jobs successfully. When their
expectations are not satisfied, they will certainly feel bored and do not want to keep
on track. I myself experienced this situation. When I attended Hong Duc University,
my fundamental aim was to study tourism, not to gain confidence. That means I
wanted to be trained to work professionally in this field. Unexpectedly, some of my
lecturers did not meet our needs, including me and my classmates. As a result, some
of my classmates dropped out of the course and the rest continued the program
without any achievements due to their bad attitude towards their teachers’ lectures.
Needless to say, academic institutions should put in priority teaching students
specific knowledge.
In the second place, people can obviously see the advantages of teaching
specific knowledge in aspect of preparing students for the further study in higher
education. In other words, if students are equipped with sufficient knowledge, they
can easily pursue their interests triumphantly as they have some essential knowledge
in hand. My sister’s case is a clear-cut example to illustrate this view. When she

graduated from college, thanks to having a great deal of information which she
gained in her college professors, she could effortlessly enroll in her master program.
Therefore, teaching specific knowledge at schools not only suits student’s purpose,
but also benefits them in getting higher education.
The final reason taken into my account is that being provided with profound
understanding of a particular area enables students to easily attain a good job after
their graduation. It is obviously seen that all kinds of jobs require people to have
particular knowledge to work efficiently. With an expected amount of knowledge,
applicants will impress their potential employers since they can answer all questions
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related to their major in the job interview to be accepted into company. My friend
Tam got a job as a doctor in a big hospital in my city after graduating from Medical
University. She had learned valuable lessons of her major in her university. As a
result, she easily got a job in her specialization. Had she only learned confidence,
not any specific lessons of her major in her college, the position would not have
been for her. Without doubt, learning specific knowledge is far more significant in
aspect of preparing students for their future careers.
By and large, teaching specific understanding should be taken into account for
its remarkable benefits. It matches the first and foremost reason for student’s present
at schools. Moreover, it is a preparation for students to sign up for a graduate
education program and to land a good job. These are the convincing reasons to
explain why I support the idea that students should be taught expected lessons of
their fields of interest rather than self-confidence in school.
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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to give students awards for their efforts rather than their
achievements. Use specific reasons and examples to support your perspective.

There is a fact that rewards always bring about great encouragement to students’
academic performances. Some people believe that it will be better if a school’s prizes to
students are based on how many efforts they make. Others, on the other hand, reckon that
these rewards should be based primarily on students’ success. As far as I am concerned, I
personally support the former perspective for several crucial reasons.
First and foremost, rewards may admonish learners to study harder.
Undeniably, there are some learners who have got fair or low grades in school. This would
be good motivation for slothful learners to strive providing their school gives prizes to
students based on their endeavors. That is, schools had better place a strong emphasis on

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how much progress their students make rather than where the students are in the ranking. If
schools use rank-based reward system, students lagging behind hardly get awards, which
may greatly motivate them to catch up with the permanent top students in their academic
records and simultaneously arouses positive competition among students to try harder. For
instance, one of my friends in high school always got the lowest scores in his class, so he
wanted to drop out of school because he was inconfident to go on. However, when his
teachers decided to assess the students through their efforts, then he gave up all of his bad
habits such as smoking, drinking alcohol, and playing online games to concentrate on his
study. Although he did not get the highest grades in his class, but his learning results
completely improved. Indispensably, he received appraisal from the principal for his
attempts. At last, he soon became a good example for all the laggards in school.
In addition, the effort-based reward system is fair for all students. It is clear that a lot
of students were unluckily born into poor families, so they often get lower grades than their
wealthy peers on account of their shortage of facilities to learn. Nevertheless, if schools
give their students prizes for their endeavors instead of their achievements, then poor
students may have more opportunities to get grants. For example, another friend of mine
named Hong had to get a part-time job in the course of studying to earn money to pay her

tuition and cover her living expenses now that she did not receive any financial aid from her
family. She was never one of the most excellent students, and got any scores, but she
received a lot of admiration from her acquaintances because she never gave up her dreams
and always strived to overcome her predicament. Finally, after many consistent efforts, she
had been accredited by school and was granted a full scholarship for a master course. In
brief, it is no doubt to say that by giving a gratification by evaluating how many attempts
students’ have constantly been trying may create an equitable atmosphere for all learners.
In conclusion, there are various methods to award students scholarships. With all of the
reasons that I have discussed above, I totally approve that schools should give students prizes
or rewards based on their efforts instead of based on their achievements. Words: 527

Topic: Do you think governments should spend more money on developing
sports or arts? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
(Thesis-led approach)
[Introductory paragraph]
[Opening sentence] Many countries in the world would rather spend more
money on sports than arts. As a matter of fact, they are more and more striving lately
due to their development of sports. [Your direct response to the question/thesis
statement] As far as I am concerned, I insist governments should [Main idea] set
aside a large budget to support [Topic] athletics because athletics can
[Scope] improve their citizens’ health, build up and consolidate their national
recognition, boost their economy.
[Body]
[Body Paragraph 1]
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[Topic sentence] The most significant upside that [Topic] sports can bring to a
country is [Controlling idea] improving its citizen’s health. [Reasons]
Undoubtedly, when a government builds up and upgrades its sports facilities, such as

stadiums, and gyms, more people will go there to work out and play sports. As a
result, people will have a better health. A good health is extremely vital inasmuch as
an unhealthy person is certainly unable to make good performances in their
professional, academic and daily lives. [Concrete example] For example, my friend
Nhan started work-out at the gym a year ago. After three months, his health was
clearly developed and then he had a good shape. Consequently, thanks to his good
health, he could work longer hours and study effectively. Only after two years, he
received a good promotion and was awarded a master degree of upper distinction.
[Concluding sentence] In short, athletics plays a comparatively important role in
improving people’s health, which helps people enhance their performances.
[Body paragraph 2]
[Topic
sentence]
In
addition
to
developing
inhabitants’
health, athletics [Topic] is alsoresponsible for building the national
recognition [Controlling idea]. [Reasons] Undeniably, a country with developed
sports will gain good reputation, which all the residents obviously take pride in.
[Concrete example] For instance, Brazil used to be a poor country. However,
thanks to its government’s entertainment policy, Brazil soon attained a worldwide
recognition for its soccer. That is why almost all people in the world now know its
image. When people hear or talk about this famous country, they immediately think
about its sports as distinguished mark. Brazilian people must smile a lot when asked
“Where are you from” since they are very proud of their country. [Concluding
sentence] In brief, investments in sports unquestionably help build up a country’s
acclaim.
[Body Paragraph 3]

[Topic sentence] The final advantage that athletics [Topic] brings about
is economic development [Controlling idea]. [Reasons] When a country is well
recognized, many foreign people in turn want to take vacation there to sightsee that
country in person, which leads to the development of a tremendous number of other
services. In other words, foreign tourists must spend money on these services on
holiday to a certain extent. [Example] Take an example, industries and agriculture
of Thailand are not actually developed, but it attracts millions of international
tourists each year partly as its sports are optimal. In particular, Thai has usually won
soccer championships in recent Sea Games competitions before Vietnam.
Undeniably, this country’s economy depends considerably on its tourism.
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