IELTS WRITING 30 1 2016

Bài mẫu band 8.0 đề thi ngày 30/1/2016
Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a
more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you agree or disagree?
Bài mẫu band 8.0
Despite the popularity of prison sentences as the way to control illegalities(1), improvements
on education have gained social endorsement(2) as a means to eliminate the problem from its
root(3). In my opinion, I disagree that education is the better one as it is rather impossible to
compare these two methods’ effectiveness owing to their distinct impacts.
On the one hand, the reasons why prisons are of indispensable necessity(4) for social
security(5) are varied. They are the place to keep people who have broken the law contained,
ensuring the safety of other citizens. Especially, dangerous criminals such as murderers or
rapists have to be imprisoned(6) for their heinous actions(7). Furthermore, severe prison
sentences act as adeterrent against(8) crimes. Knowing there might be a chance of getting
caught and condemned to jail(9), which also means losing freedom and living a miserable life in
a cell, ones who are having the intention of committing illegalities would reconsider going down
the path.
On the other hand, education serves as a remedy for the origin of crimes(10). Education
contributes greatly to heighten people’s intellect(11) and to form a civilized society(12). With
access to better educational services, citizens would be well-informed about the damage that
committing crimes would cause to their community and themselves, which eventually leads to
the decline in crime rates. Additionally, the possession of certain qualifications through
fundamental education like vocational training(13) could secure a person’s stable life, which
would dispel any ideas of committing crimes(14).
In conclusion, I believe there is no absolute way to deduce whether imprisonment policies or
better education would take the dominant role in dealing with crimes as they both tackle the
problem just in different ways.

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