Tài liệu Speaking and Writing Strategies for the TOEFL iBT part 8 doc

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Let’s map out another reason prompt using G+3TiC=C and the six steps to
demonstrate OPDUL=C
in your essay.










Note: This test-taker has completed steps #2 to #5.




TASK: Check this essay for coherence using the Independent Essay
Proficiency Checklist on page 306, then rate it using the Independent
Essay Rating Guide on page 308. Compare your proficiency checklist
and your rating to those on page 337.

Note: There are mistakes in this essay. Can you identify them?

Prompt If could change the world, what would you do? Give
illustrations and reasons to support your argument.

If I can, I will stop all the pollutes in world this day. First, I no
more the pollute from cars. This pollute is CO2. This stop green
gazes. Next, I will no more the plastic bottle. These day
everywhere you look is water bottle. This is a big problem. You
can find this bottle everywhere. Finally, noisey pollution. I live
in Roma. Is so noisey pollute I can no sleep. Now I work and
live in Manhattan and is still same noisey pollution. For that
reasons, I stop the pollutes.

Words: 91

3.

Reason: Step-by-Step

Submit your essay.


Step #6
Carefully read the prompt; formulate an opinion.
Step #1
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Let’s map out another reason prompt using G+3TiC=C and the six steps to
demonstrate OPDUL=C
in your essay.

Note: This test-taker is using induction as a method of organizing her
argument.

Note: There are mistakes in the draft on the next page. Can you

identify them?





Prompt How has technology made our lives better? Develop
your argument using examples and reasons.



G =

Ti = example sister
C

Ti = also typewriter
C

Ti = finally car
C

C = for the aforementioned reasons life is better



4.

Reason: Step-by-Step

Carefully read the prompt; formulate an opinion.
Step #1

Make a note map; state your opinion (G); restate it in
your conclusion (C); develop examples (3TiC).


Step #2
Type a first draft. Do not include the note map.
Step #3
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Note: This test-taker has checked her first draft for coherence using
OPDUL=C
and has moved on to step #5.




Note: This test-taker has revised her essay according to her revision
checklist and moved on to step #6.




TASK: Check the essay on the next page for coherence using the
Independent Essay Proficiency Checklist on page 310, then rate it
using the Independent Essay Rating Guide on page 312. Compare
your proficiency checklist and your rating to those on page 337.

My sister had brest cancer ten year ago. She was able to
have it treated with chemotherapy. Chemo are very powerful
cancer drugs. My sister is alive because of this drugs. This
medical technology definately made my sister’s life better.
At high school never had computers. We had just only old
fashioned typewriters. When I was tying, I made lots of
mistake, so always I had to go back and start over again. But
now with computers, typing is fast and so easy. If I make a
mistake, all I to do is back space or cut and delete. Using a
computer has made my live better, especially now writing this
TOEFL esay.
Finally, I can say that the car has made a big chance in
my life. Before I had to always go everywhere by the bus. I
hated it. It took up so much of my time. Also when I went to
work, I have to get up early and sometimes the bus was late
an never came. The bus was a nightmare for me. But then I
got a car and no longer did I need the bus. Owning a car has
definately made my life better.
For the aforementioned, you can see how technology has
definately changed my life and many others for the better.

Check your first draft for Coherence using OPDUL=C.

Step #4
Revise your first draft using your revision checklist.

Step #5
Submit your essay.


Step #6
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When my sister was told she had breast cancer, she was able
to have it treated with special drugs called chemotherapy.
“Chemo” is very powerful medicine. My sister had to take it by

IV every day for six weeks. It made her really sick but without
chemo, my sister might not be here today. She had cancer ten
years ago and today she is happy with a good job and a big
family. As you can see, medical technology such as
chemotherapy has made my sister’s life better.

Another example is when I was in high school. When I was
learning how to type, we never had computers. We just had
old fashioned typewriters. They were really hard to use
because the keys were so heavy. Also, when I was typing, I
made lots of mistake, so I had to go back and start again. But
now with computers, typing is fast and easy. If I make a
mistake, I can back space or cut and delete. Using a computer
has definitely made my life better, especially now writing this
TOEFL essay.

Finally, I can say that the car has really made a big difference
in my life. Before I bought a car, I commuted by bus. I hated
it. It took up so much time. Also, when I went to work, I had
to get up early and sometimes the bus was late or never came.
What a hassle! In a nutshell, the bus was a nightmare. But
then I got a car, and suddenly the bus was history. Now I can
go anywhere, anytime. I can’t live without my car. Owning one
has really made my life better.

For the aforementioned reasons, you can see how technology
has made a positive impact on my life and other lives as well.

Words: 302

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Quality prompts ask you to argue in support of the qualities of a person, place or
thing. Qualities means positive aspects or characteristics, for example:









When answering a quality prompt, use G+3TiC=C and the six steps to demonstrate
OPDUL=C
in your essay.

Prompt What are the qualities of a good university? Develop
your position using illustrations and reasons.


Prompt What are the qualities of a good university? Develop
your position using illustrations and reasons.



G = good qualities = Shelton University, it has good
teachers, courses + location

Ti = for example Shelton U., excellent ESL teachers
lots of experience, helpful, nice too
C = teachers help me improve my English quickly

Ti = moreover lots of courses; grammar, business
C = business english helped me get a job

Ti = in addition good location, subway close to school
C = take subway to school saves time, very convenient

C = for those reasons good qualities = excellent teachers,
courses and location, like Shelton U.



Quality Prompts

Quality: Step-by-Step

Carefully read the prompt; formulate an opinion.
Step #1

Make a note map; state your opinion (G); restate it in
your conclusion (C); develop examples (3TiC).


Step #2